At me a similar situation. I invite to discussion.
The very root of your writing whilst appearing agreeable originally, did not settle well with me personally after some time. Someplace throughout the paragraphs you managed to make me a believer but only for a very short while. I still have got a problem with your jumps in logic and you would do nicely to fill in all those breaks. In the event that you can accomplish that, I will surely be amazed.